So I've written up script for the pages RE-Man has drawn so far, and just for fun I thought I'd quickly put the dialogue onto Vartha's inks, for a couple of reasons. I wanted to see how the word balloons would fit on the page, making sure the art isn't obscured and the flow is correct. I also wanted to see how the dialogue itself would flow; I found myself making a couple of changes to the script once I put the words on the page.
Once we have coloured art I will put the balloons on with better software than I have at work (I had to use Powerpoint, whereas at home I have Photoshop), so the fonts will be better and I hope to be able to connect some of the balloons rather than have each one completely separate.
So how does the dialogue read? Any changes, either to wording or placement, you think should be done?
I've been tweaking the first page I posted, and this is my first run at page 4.